The last time I read it I felt like things were happening and scenes were changing too quickly, but I didn't get that impression this time? The thing that bugs me the most is still how Jacky is caught. It doesn't suit her personality. I want time to fix it!! But I'm forever backlogged on comms.

I'm not dunking on my work when I say these things, just thinking out loud. Giving yourself constructive feedback doesn't hurt as long as it's not a kick in the ribs, Lol